Writing Process #3- Revising

After I had written most of my informational essay, I began the revising process. I started with adding more information into the introductory and concluding paragraphs. I also added more detail into the descriptions of my quotations. I took out many sentences that seemed redundant after providing the quotes, and tried to explain them in a different way. I moved two quotes around, as I found that they fit better into different areas of the text, than in their previous spot. Finally, I added in clearer transitions between the paragraphs. After I had written most of my narrative essay, I went back through it to alter some phrasing. I did additional research on terms and phrases from that time period and changed some sentences around, as I wanted it to be as historically accurate as possible. I decided not to use very difficult words, however, for I wanted younger students to be able to comprehend the text. I also added in some real dates and characters that I thought would be more interesting.